One thing I would do if I were President is provide more money for education. Schools need more money so they can provide computers, books, and other materials for students. We also need to update our schools so that they are clean and safe. Finally, we need more money in the schools so we can hire more teachers. A President should give more money to the schools.
Another thing I would do if I were President is make chocolate the official food for the country. I would do this because chocolate is the best food ever.
The last thing I would do if I were President is make it easier for people to live in places that are safe. I think that if you are living in a dangerous area, it should be easier for you to move out of that area to someplace safe.
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February 16th, 2007 at 1:38 pm
In the second paragraph, I would add more reasons.
February 16th, 2007 at 1:40 pm
How would you help them move out?
Maybe you should find another goal instead of the chocolate because Dajevon says it would be unhealthy.
February 16th, 2007 at 1:41 pm
In the last paragraph, what if the people don’t have enough money to move? What would you do?
February 16th, 2007 at 1:43 pm
The last paragraph isn’t a paragraph. There’s a topic sentence, but there is only one supporting detail. You need t include more reasons why you have that goal, and a concluding sentence.
February 16th, 2007 at 2:06 pm
I would love to make chocolate the
official food of the country. That would
be awesome but what if some is allergic
to chocolate?
February 16th, 2007 at 2:06 pm
I would love to make chocolate the
official food of the country. That would
be awesome but what if someone is allergic
to chocolate?
micole&monica
February 16th, 2007 at 2:17 pm
Hi Mrs. Nierlich this is Micole and Monica.
We are trying to see if hyper links work so
here we go:)
From :
Micole:) and Monica:)
February 16th, 2007 at 2:20 pm
TUBULAR!
CHOCOLATE IS berlly!
From,
Kimberlly
February 16th, 2007 at 2:21 pm
Nice paragraph Mrs.Nierlich. I would add more details on paragraph 2. All the rest of the paragraph are fine for me.
February 16th, 2007 at 2:22 pm
TUBULAR!
CHOCOLATE IS GOOD!
From,
Kimberlly
February 16th, 2007 at 2:27 pm
I Likes your president story because I like chocholate too.But can you give us like more candy.PLEASE!!!I am begging you I am going to die.But I love your pharagrahp.
One of your favorite kids,
Erin
February 16th, 2007 at 2:44 pm
CHOCOLATE, CHOCOLATE, CHOCOLATE, CHOCOLATE, CHOCOLATE, CHOCOLATE, CHOCOLATE, CHOCOLATE, CHOCOLATE, CHOCOLATE,
AND MMMMIIIINNNNTTTTT CCCCHHHHOOOOCCCCOOOOLLLLAAAATTTTEEEE TOO. CAN I HAVE SOME CHOCOLATE. By Johnathan
February 16th, 2007 at 2:55 pm
Hello! Mrs. Nierlich, good info by the way. I got comment. The thing you said that you want to build a chocolate factory I think it’s a good idea because you like chocolate very much but I also think that making a chocolate factory is not really a good idea to do if you were a president because there are more important things to do other than making a chocolate factory. I”m not really saying that making a chocolate factory is not a good idea. It is a good idea but may-be you could make the factory if you already acomplish all of your other good things to do to people. I just want to say that because it is better to waste your money by helping the people to be safe and healthy rather than by wasting your money by making a chocolate factory.
from Jorge or you may call me as Wren.
February 20th, 2007 at 2:49 pm
Micole
February 27th, 2007 at 12:19 am
Mrs. Nierlich guess what, I finished changing my president paragraph and it’s all colored by blue. And I finally know how to edit the first president paragraph. That’s all I wanted to say to you so, I hope your happy.
by: Jorge or call me Wren